第二节负能量批判型
6. 雾霾
directions:
write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. in your essay, you should
1. describe the drawing briefly,
2. interpret its intended meaning, and then
3. give your comments.
you should write neatly on the answer sheet.
审题及提纲
图画中的一男一女佩戴着夸张的大口罩,面对面站着却在伸头张望,由文字提示可知,他们看不清彼此。这不禁使人联想到近来很热门的空气污染问题:雾霾。众所周知,雾霾会对人体健康造成危害,这也正是图中二人均佩戴口罩的原因——防止吸入pm2.5。文章的主题由此确立。考生可先对当前的空气状况进行描述,然后着重论述空气污染对人体健康造成的危害并分析造成污染的原因。
第一段:描述图画。先对细节展开描述,注意需出现有关雾霾的描述性语句。比如,对二者佩戴口罩的描述以及近在咫尺却无法看清彼此的描述。然后引出图画所反映的问题。
第二段:结合现实,充分延展。先描述当今雾霾的状况,可给出相关调查或报道中的数据加以佐证,由此引出雾霾的危害性,最后引申到雾霾的成因。
第三段:总结评论。呼吁人们为了自身健康保护环境。
经典模板范文
under the haze stand a male and a female
who are wearing masks respectively, being apart for only just a half meter. they are stretching their heads, seemingly to find something. after a long, hard stare, they ultimately find that it is a person who stands opposite. apparently, a murky haze swallows us around the corner.
the picture ironically illustrates how terrible air pollution is. sadly as it is, the phenomenon in the picture is a daily reality. a survey
conducted by china environmental protection association shows that the average reading of pm2.5 in major cities of china is hundreds times higher than that in developed countries. such horrible air conditions are posing a threat to our health and fitness. dirty air or air-borne particles may cause stinging eyes and running nose. these pollutants are hazardous. a notable example is that everyday thousands of people die of lung cancer and asthma caused by air pollution. some people regard the emergence of air pollution as the side effect of the stimulus-encouraged car-buying spree. however, the real blame should be put on the uncontrolled industrial development.
even though the issue whether it is worth sacrificing the environment for the development of economy remains controversial, there is definitely something we can do to save the environment for our own sake, such as taking public transport more often and use renewable energy wherever we can.
相隔不过半米的一位男士和一位女士各自戴着一个大口罩站在雾霾下。他们伸长了脖子,似乎在寻找什么。经过艰难长久的观察之后,他们最终发现站在对面的是一个人。很明显,浑浊的雾霾吞没了近在咫尺的你我。
这幅图讽刺地阐释了空气污染的严重性。尽管看起来令人心酸,但图中的现象却是生活中的事实。一项由中国环保协会开展的调查表明:中国主要城市的pm2.5平均值是发达国家的几百倍。如此糟糕的空气质量正在威胁着我们的健康。污染的空气和空中浮游物会引起眼睛刺痛、流鼻涕。这些污染物是有危害的。一个显著的例子就是每天都有几千人死于由空气污染引发的肺癌和哮喘。有人将空气污染的出现视为刺激和鼓励汽车消费的副作用。但是,真正的责任方应该是无节制的工业发展。
尽管关于以牺牲环境为代价来发展经济是否值得这个问题仍具有争议性,但是为了自己,我们一定可以采取一些措施来拯救环境,比如尽量多乘坐公共交通工具以及尽可能地使用可再生能源。
靓词靓语
haze n.霾;霭
side effect 副作用
stretch v.伸展;张开
illustrate v.阐明;图解
emergence n.出现;浮现
stimulus n.刺激;激励
sacrifice v.牺牲;奉献
average a.平均的;普通的
ironically ad.讽刺地;说反话地
hazardous a.有害的;危险的
靓句分析
①sadly as it is, the phenomenon in the picture is a daily reality.
本句旨在将图画信息与现实情况相结合,既承接上文,又为下文论述环境污染的现状埋下伏笔。该句的亮点是“as”的使用:as引导让步状语从句,表示“虽然,尽管”,从句使用倒装语序,使整个句子简洁而不简单。
②however, the real blame should be put on the uncontrolled industrial development.
本句划线部分可视作模板句式,用于引出造成某一现象或问题的真正原因。继上文提出“the stimulus-encouraged carbuying spree”这一表面原因之后,作者以“however”起句,并选用“the real blame should be put on…”这一结构引出真正的责任方。与“the real reason is…”等平铺直叙的表述相比,这种写法更具新意。
③even though the issue whether it is worth sacrificing the environment for the development of economy remains controversial, there is definitely something we can do to save the environment for our own sake, such as taking public transport more often and use renewable energy wherever we can.
本句为结尾段,既总结了全文,又深化了主题。even though引导的让步状语从句是对前文中造成空气污染的原因的重述;主句是对文章主旨的进一步延伸,即呼吁人们从自身出发,保护环境。句尾“such as”引导的短语为具体措施的举例,使作者的呼吁更加充实有力。结尾虽一句成段,但句子结构清晰,层次分明,且信息表达完整,是考生模仿的典范。
源自《写作160篇》
19考研第一阶段必备书单:
单词:
学渣专用的词汇书:《非常词汇》(660句搞定考研词汇)
如果你不想花太多时间去背单词:那就用《必考词应用全书》(2周就能搞定必考词)
长难句:
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真题:
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